Feedback of the Pitch

Here are all the comments people have said for our pitch which we presented to the class today. Though some of them are simply positive comments, there are still some suggestions which might help improve our music video.

• Filming from the car boot might make the shot shakey. We have thought about this, however the street in which we were intending to use is very smooth with rarely any potholes so we feel it wouldn't be too shakey.
• Location/setting? Alot of people had commented saying where would we find a location where we could film the person singing, however we have found a very long road which is rarely used so it would be perfect for filming, and the houses are all very american style looking and upper class so it would fit into the mise-en-scene we wanted.
• Good Idea
• American style hard to recreate. When we said we wanted it to be kind of american looking, we didn't literally mean we wanted it to look like it was filmed in America. We have found a perfect street in Wollaton where all the houses are big, looked after and spread out.
• Interesting Ideas
• Idea was really good but vague. I feel like our idea isn't vague, as we have decided what performing we are having (girl on bicycle) and we have decided what narrative we want and on what lines.
• Good song to pick
• Original Idea
• Plain presentation but detailed. We decided to keep it quite simple to keep the focus on what we were saying. We didnt want to be repeating everything that was already written on the powerpoint.
• Difficult idea but good. We feel that the idea is actually the complete opposite to this. Our idea is simple but if we do it correctly, it will be very effective.
• Could be repetitive throwing newspapers. We thought this would be the case, which is why we are including flashbacks so it doesn't get too repetitive.
• Poor quality music. The music we decided to play in the pitch wasn't the best quality which we understand, however we do have a better quality as Becy has the soundtrack which is of high quality.
• Does she sing? Yes she does sing, whilst on her bicycle.
• I like the idea of using an artist with no videos.
• I think your main idea could do with more added to it. Maybe we should add more flashbacks and narrative however we didn't want too much incase it gets a bit too confusing.
• Good idea about the bike but is it going to cover the time? Probably not which is why we're having narrative and flashbacks.
• Really like idea and song.
• Song might be a bit short. The song length is 2:53. This does not seem too short, however to be over 3 minutes, we might add a little introduction before hand e.g. having the main character collect her newspapers and getting her bicycle out ready.
• Hope you do the chase thing, if you get it right it'll be good! Room for loads more ideas, looking forward to seeing it!

From looking at these comments, the majority of them are about it being too repetitive. To prevent this, we shall add more narrative flashbacks as it also expands on the idea to create a more creative music video.